Theme and Narrative developments

PEER ASSESSMENT

We typed out our first draft in professional script format and corrected any spelling and grammar errors. We then had to read our drama out in front of the class. A few more characters were needed for the reading so we asked a couple of our classmates to join in.

I believe it went quite well as the reading was quite fluent and many people got the gist of the play and found the comedy in it. however there were some areas of the script that wasn't so clear and needed extra explanation from our group after the reading. One of these areas was scene 2 when a text was received by Vivienne who was threatening to destroy the fashion show. I believe the confusion was mainly because sound effects were needed at the time to put emphasis on the arriving text message which
will be edited during the production
phase using sound-pro.

There were also some queries about our character Roxy who was meant to be a close friend to Lauren, someone who she could confine in during the disasters during our radio drama. unfortunately this relationship was not portrayed during our radio drama so we had no option but to get rid of her. As a group we think this is a good change mainly because there were a lot more characters in the drama than we initially wanted and getting rid of one would be something less to worry about. Another good thing about this change is that we can now focus on the main 3 characters Lauren Vivienne and Chris and try to create a stronger relationship between our target audience and the characters by making them more relatable. starting off with a minimum amount of characters gives us the opportunity to add to the cast during the drama development in future series.

We gave most of Roxy's lines to Chris making a best friend to Lauren as well as just a boyfriend. we gave one of the lines to a model in scene 3/4 to create a employer and employee relationship to show how the range of people that admire her in different levels of intimacy so our listeners can then choose which category they would prefer to fall in to.

During our very first development stage we were told the drama was a bit short so doing this has created more dialogue in turn consuming more time to produce a full drama.